This week we have been learning to rework our writing to make our paragraphs interesting for our audience. We started by writing a creative sentence about this picture. As a class we will choose Nate's sentence because we liked it the best and wrote a paragraph each to follow the chosen sentence. Here is the beginning of my story that starts with Nate's sentence.
A spaceman bravely walks out into the icy milkyway. The milky way is a galese that looks like milk. The milky way is a big galese that is looks like a black hole but just with a milky colour.
A black hole is like a dimension. A dimension is a sucking death machine. If anything goes in to the black hole it will get creached and suked up to peaces.
The preacher in the black hole is so so hie that if anything goes in it and i mean anything that goes in the black hole it will be creached and suked up to peaces. If you go in the black hole apostle everything in your body will be shredded. Apostle nathank in the universe has ever gotten out of a black hole.
Nathank in the universe has gone thero a black hole because it will creached you to pieces. If enthink went thero a black hole you will need the thickest rocket in the world to get past a black hole. If you go i a black hole in the other side you will only see space and crashed stuff like a ship a suns galeses everything that went into a black hole that is what you will see but carshed.
You will only see crashed stuff because the preacher in the black hole takes more preacher than the space. There will be also milky ways in the black hole. You might even take some pictures inside the black hole.
